Tämä se on mikä netissä mättää!
Feb. 27th, 2003 01:02 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
emmuzkaOkay, hear this:
I browse my groups and this is what I read:
**************begins:
Your pregnant??? Alex OH MY GOD Kevin saids as he takes AJ's in his arms and he is kisses him yet again.
KEVIN STOP IT, The baby is not yours. AJ saids
Don't give me that bullshit Alex you know damn well there is a chance that baby is mine.
No Kevin don't say that, that's a fucking lie.Don't start making up things.
I'm not Alex you know what happen the night when we....
Shut the Fuck Up Kevin, I don't know why I bother with you, I'm out of here AJ saids
(etc.)***************'Ends. (In Between by Dee Dee)
And what I do? I write some stinging feedback:
******************
Okay, the story is good. I can't wait to read it through.
Other thing: Please show some respect to your readers and be
bothered to use proper spelling ang grammar. For example:
Please please please use the " "-marks. The text is really hard to
read without them, plus it makes the writer seem like she's 12.
And it makes us readers really irritated. You can't just ignore the
common rules of writing just because you feel lazy or don't
actually know how to write.
Second, there is not such word as saids. It's
"What did he say?, he asked, or
"What are you saying?" he said/ says.
So please locate the spell checer.
And are you writing this in a present or in past tense or what?
Are you even aware the you are writing in a present tense (most
of the time) The present is seldom used, just check *any* book
or fic to find that out. Choose one tense and stick with it.
The story is nice and promising, but let me tell you, you *will*
lose readers because of the bad formatting. So once you have
written a chapter, there is no rush to post it. Give it a thought and
work with it a little. The results can surprise you.
Emmuzka
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Right. This is her reply :
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I can take constructive critisism , and you were right about the
grammar and alot of other things. Which were true. But that to be was
all around bashing there is not another word for it. I don't know if
you meant well, but that was not call for at all. I still know where
you were coming from on some terms. Also Those were both my drafts. I
can not even explain why those were sent out. That was huge mistake
on my part. But anyway as for respect. Respect for a writer goes the
same as the respect for a reader. The person could be horrible but i
would encourage them in someway that they can do better with there
writing. Remarks like that with some people regardless if they are
strong or not will make them feel low and will not benefit the writer
at all. Sometimes you have to be careful how you word things.Oh feel
free to read the right chapters, or not. It doesn't matter to me
either way i just thought i put it out there.Thanks for the FB
Dee Dee
******************
Okay. At this time I chose to remove this from the list and I mailed her privately:
*******************
Hi
I apologize, I didn't mean my reply to soud like bashing. I noticed that what I critisized were the drafts that were sent by some mistake. I didn't know that in that time so I had a reason to believe that your story wasn't polished for some other reason.
I'm sorry if I made you feel miserable. I just looked at the story and the lack of quotation marks made me see red. I didn't mean anything personal and I hope that I didn't discourage you.
Emmuzka
**********************
She sent her draft to the list and is offended when people say it's no good? Huh? And what about my final response? Was that enough groveling? What do you think? This is whats so shitty about the net: Anything that *can* be understood wrong of taken personally, *will*, so the only two strategies exists: Be either a bland I-Love-You-All-type or a hated bitch. I wouldn't be bothered to choose either one.
Other things: Thank you all that responded my fan fictoin questionnaire! You are so nice!
I browse my groups and this is what I read:
**************begins:
Your pregnant??? Alex OH MY GOD Kevin saids as he takes AJ's in his arms and he is kisses him yet again.
KEVIN STOP IT, The baby is not yours. AJ saids
Don't give me that bullshit Alex you know damn well there is a chance that baby is mine.
No Kevin don't say that, that's a fucking lie.Don't start making up things.
I'm not Alex you know what happen the night when we....
Shut the Fuck Up Kevin, I don't know why I bother with you, I'm out of here AJ saids
(etc.)***************'Ends. (In Between by Dee Dee)
And what I do? I write some stinging feedback:
******************
Okay, the story is good. I can't wait to read it through.
Other thing: Please show some respect to your readers and be
bothered to use proper spelling ang grammar. For example:
Please please please use the " "-marks. The text is really hard to
read without them, plus it makes the writer seem like she's 12.
And it makes us readers really irritated. You can't just ignore the
common rules of writing just because you feel lazy or don't
actually know how to write.
Second, there is not such word as saids. It's
"What did he say?, he asked, or
"What are you saying?" he said/ says.
So please locate the spell checer.
And are you writing this in a present or in past tense or what?
Are you even aware the you are writing in a present tense (most
of the time) The present is seldom used, just check *any* book
or fic to find that out. Choose one tense and stick with it.
The story is nice and promising, but let me tell you, you *will*
lose readers because of the bad formatting. So once you have
written a chapter, there is no rush to post it. Give it a thought and
work with it a little. The results can surprise you.
Emmuzka
******************************
Right. This is her reply :
*******************************
I can take constructive critisism , and you were right about the
grammar and alot of other things. Which were true. But that to be was
all around bashing there is not another word for it. I don't know if
you meant well, but that was not call for at all. I still know where
you were coming from on some terms. Also Those were both my drafts. I
can not even explain why those were sent out. That was huge mistake
on my part. But anyway as for respect. Respect for a writer goes the
same as the respect for a reader. The person could be horrible but i
would encourage them in someway that they can do better with there
writing. Remarks like that with some people regardless if they are
strong or not will make them feel low and will not benefit the writer
at all. Sometimes you have to be careful how you word things.Oh feel
free to read the right chapters, or not. It doesn't matter to me
either way i just thought i put it out there.Thanks for the FB
Dee Dee
******************
Okay. At this time I chose to remove this from the list and I mailed her privately:
*******************
Hi
I apologize, I didn't mean my reply to soud like bashing. I noticed that what I critisized were the drafts that were sent by some mistake. I didn't know that in that time so I had a reason to believe that your story wasn't polished for some other reason.
I'm sorry if I made you feel miserable. I just looked at the story and the lack of quotation marks made me see red. I didn't mean anything personal and I hope that I didn't discourage you.
Emmuzka
**********************
She sent her draft to the list and is offended when people say it's no good? Huh? And what about my final response? Was that enough groveling? What do you think? This is whats so shitty about the net: Anything that *can* be understood wrong of taken personally, *will*, so the only two strategies exists: Be either a bland I-Love-You-All-type or a hated bitch. I wouldn't be bothered to choose either one.
Other things: Thank you all that responded my fan fictoin questionnaire! You are so nice!
