Love-hate, part 4684376

[emmuzka]

So, it was glambert_fic that has all its comments screened, not kradam_ai.

A moment ago I commented to this probably unauthorized try-out to fish from Isolde13's pool:

To who Adam explains this? If Adam addresses straight the reader, that is an interesting, if not a highly old fashioned writing method.

Personally, I'm not receiving the emotional impact from this what should be required concerning this being a slave fic. If we take this tidbit as a part of Isolde's continuum (Did you ask her permission, by the way?), Adam appears strong and unbreakable, when in reality, he is already flawed underneath his shell. Maybe you could have explored more in this text that the strong-thing Adam explains to the reader is actually only his outer shell.

Opinions? Is my comment against the community's rule about being courteous? Because if my comment won't be unscreened, I'm done with this community.